Enchanted

I was enchanted by her beauty

the first time I saw her.

Laying there with her silky velvet body,

crisp skin,

fluffy red cherry-lips tempting enough to caress.

One soft bite of that

cheesecake took me to heaven.

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This piece is written for Trifecta Writing Challenge .They wanted a 38 words piece including “The first time I saw…” Line anywhere in the piece. If you like it, don’t forget to vote on Friday. Click on the badge to check other awesome submissions.

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55 thoughts on “Enchanted

  1. I see what you did there! πŸ˜€ beautiful posts Lala..enjoyed reading through them as always..loving this new space too! I hope and pray this finds you well and in great spirits..much love 😊 😘

  2. Nice subject and poem, no doubt but, and I can’t believe it hasn’t been mentioned by anyone yet but, all of the words were supposed to be one syllable words. You have many multi-syllabic words. They are lovely words about a lovely dessert but, just the same………..Sorry. 😦

    • Thanks so much Cobbie for the appreciation. To clear you out, I knew the One syllable thing and I write the way I feel comfortable and I wasn’t feeling comfortable following the one syllable thing that’s why I didn’t followed it. I guess writing should be a concern, rules are just for the people who write to compete…I write to satisfy myself πŸ™‚ Thanks for your concern kindly πŸ™‚ Love you xx

  3. Lala, this whole piece took me to heaven! (But I saved room for seconds, thirds, fourths…so I read it again, and again, and again..!) Wonderfully delicious, my friend!!! xx

    • Lol yes it was actually meant to be a cheesecake πŸ˜› Lol I am sensing your mind going somewhere else. Taste the cheesecake Ali πŸ˜‰ Thanks so much for stopping by πŸ™‚ Love xx

  4. Oh sweet lord, I love cheesecake. Great write!! Thanks for linking up. Just a reminder–this week is judged by the editors, not the community. Only every third challenge is community judged.

    • Haha I love them too πŸ™‚ Your prompt initiated my food-fetish πŸ˜‰ Thanks for stopping by !
      And thank you so much for the correction. Actually I am new here so I thought the voting and editor’s choice thing is at alternate weeks. Correcting it ! Thanks πŸ™‚

  5. Well..when i was Ill cheesecake really turned me on…

    But now that i am on in the NOw…

    i don’t seem to want IT any more than NOW…..

    Matter fact..not even the other thing you teased us with…:)

    US guys that IS…i guess….

    But anyway..i enjoyed the punch line..even though i do not
    want to eat IT

    lovexx

      • Get slice from where? The picture? LOL
        It’s okay though. My sugar craving is over. Just baked some delicious cookies. Wanna have some? ;p

        • Lol you can take it from the picture or from any bakery near by your house πŸ˜›
          Aray Waah you know baking ? What can be more awesome than that πŸ˜› I would love to taste them πŸ™‚

          • Yup, I know baking. But I just bake things that have chocolate in them. Cheesecakes are an exception. All the remaining things that don’t have chocolate are too boring, so I don’t bake those. LOL.
            I’ll bake you cookies when we go to some picnic like the one I’d told you about on new year. When will you be ready?? πŸ˜€

            • Haha I love chocolate too yaar you are making me crave for some chocolate cookies definitely made by you πŸ˜› As I happen to know you are a very good chef πŸ˜› πŸ˜› Aray That’s a dream to eat cookies made by you πŸ˜› I can die for it πŸ˜› I am ready all the time every minute and every second πŸ˜‰

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